2007年9月19日 星期三
Tired
This is the second year that I have part-time work. Since May in 2006 ,I started working. Time goes so fast that I can't believe it. Someone may say that having a part-time job is good for student because we can get experience from that. But for me, that's so tired and exausted. However, I still need to work because I don't want my parents worry about me. So, keep going!
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"Since May in 2006 ," ==> "Since May 2006," You don't need the preposition "in" here.
"good for student because we" ==> "good for students because we". Here the use of "we" is okay because the statement is about all students.
"But for me, that's so tired and exausted." ==> "But for me, a part-time job is tiring and exhausting." OR "But my part-time job is exhausting." OR "But I feel exhausted after working my part-time job."
"Tiring" and "exhausting" mean almost the same thing. Rather than use both words, use the stronger word: "exhausting". Shorter and simpler is both clearer and more effective writing.
"I don't want my parents worry about me. So, keep going!" ==> "I don't want my parents to worry about me. So, I'll keep going!"
Clear writing. Just a couple of usage errors. Good.
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